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Can a boy put up with his overprotective mother not letting him do anything fun due to minor cuts and bruises? Well in this gut-busting book he does, at least for a while.


Sam Harris, the story鈥檚 humorous eleven year old protagonist, can鈥檛 do anything fun like play football (soccer) or walk to school with his friends. Why can鈥檛 he? Your head is probably bubbling with curiosity. He can鈥檛 do anything fun because his Mother is afraid he鈥檒l get injured. Injuries over walking to school? Like that鈥檚 ever going to happen!


Since Sam can鈥檛 do anything fun he鈥檚 bored, but not for long. Soon the hysterical Griswalds move in next-door and Sam starts having some fun but his mother is still interfering with his play. Even though the Griswalds are fun to play with, they start causing trouble doing reckless things like burning down the bus shelter. While Sam and the Griswalds are busy becoming friends, there are problems around the city involving them. Will they be able to find solutions to all of them or will it be too late? Read this rib tickling book to find out!


Emma Barnes will absorb readers of all ages into this side splitting. The pictures by Tim Archbold are really something to look at. Readers who like humour and adventure will love this really funny book. Both the paperback and hardcover of Sam and the Griswalds which has 320 pages were published in 2004 by Bloomsbury Publishing Co.Please Edit! Easy 10 points to the person who gives best advice!!!!!!!?
Sam Harris, the story鈥檚 humorous eleven year old protagonist, is unable to participate in any fun activities such as play football, or walk to school with his friends. His overprotective mother is constantly afraid he will get injured.


When the Griswalds move in next-door however, Sam's boring existence comes to an end. The Griswalds, though funny people, weren't all they seemed. Reckless, they began doing crazy things like burning down the bus shelter. Problems evolve, and soon Sam and the Griswalds are desperately trying to find solutions.


Emma Barnes will absorb readers of all ages in this side-splitting book. The pictures by the illustrator, Tim Archbold, are also fantastic. Readers who like humour and adventure will love this really funny book. The 320 page paperback and hardcover versions of ';Sam and the Griswalds'; were published in 2004 by Bloomsbury Publishing Co.








This was very poorly written and a miserable read. It looks as though you were trying to combine a book description with an obnoxious television ad..Please Edit! Easy 10 points to the person who gives best advice!!!!!!!?
All looks good except there should be a comma after football soccer should not be in parenthesis and should have a comma after it as well.
There is nothing wrong except for the capital 'M' on 'mother' at ';He can鈥檛 do anything fun because his Mother is...';





This sounds good.
First off, Ashley's right - mother oughtn't be capitalized. You also seem to use the word 'fun' quite a bit. Try rewording sentences or using synonyms to avoid this.





Also, there's a part that should be changed slightly for the sake or sentence flow. I'll rewrite it with a few minor punctuation and word changes:





Since Sam can鈥檛 do anything interesting, he鈥檚 bored - but not for long. Soon the hysterical Griswalds move in next door and Sam starts having some real fun; However, his mother is still interfering with his play. And even though the Griswalds are amusing company, they start causing trouble by doing reckless things such as burning down the bus shelter.





See, I didn't even change much, but it kind of reads easier, don't you think? Well, maybe - it's just my opinion.





Last thing, you left a sentence unfinished, like maybe you were already thinking of the next sentence and forgot to complete the previous:





Emma Barnes will absorb readers of all ages into this side splitting...?





That's something I do all the time, actually. I'll be in the middle of one sentence, and then write the next without so much as a period. :)





Other than that, it's pretty good. Believe it or not, it's actually better than a lot of the writing people in my high school yearbook class do.